This is a place for you to post your summer reading essay thesis. I know this is daunting for some of you. I hope you'll give it a shot and maybe it will pay off! :) As a general rule, if you post one for help, then you should comment on someone else's somewhere along the way. Remember to start with a positive. Also, it is NOT YOUR JOB TO REWRITE SOMEONE'S THESIS. Instead, make suggestions. For example, "What if you reworded it so it was more concise?" OR "This is how I understand your thesis...is that what you meant to convey?" Have fun!
Maddie Williams
9/7/2012 08:02:14 am

Hello everyone! As I didn't get to finish sharing my thesis in class, I would appreciate any suggestions, I'm struggling a little! Here is what I have so far:

"In The Kite Runner, Khaled Hosseini uses Amir's story to prove the point that no matter what has happened in the past and no matter what burdens one may carry, there is always a way to move on and learn from one's exprieriences."

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Emma Chester
9/7/2012 08:26:22 am

I think what you have so far is great, but a little bit "wordy." It might just be me though haha. Maybe take out "the point" so that it just reads "...uses Amir's story to prove that..."

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Mrs. Z
9/9/2012 01:36:50 am

I agree with Emma: a bit wordy. I'll give you a challenge: condense the second part of your thesis (after "Amir's story") down to 10-15 words. I bet you can and still say what you mean. :)

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Emma Chester
9/7/2012 08:30:00 am

Hey guys! So far my thesis sounds cliche and boring, so if you can help, please do! (:
Right now I have:
The underlying message that Khlaed Hosseini encorporates in his novel, The Kite Runner, is that the choices a person makes can shape the course of his or her future.

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Maddie Williams
9/7/2012 12:00:47 pm

Thanks Emma that really helped. I think yours has a really good main idea, but
Maybe you could elaborate a little bit on how the choices can affect ones future. For the better or for the worse?

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Maddie Williams
9/7/2012 12:01:13 pm

Thanks Emma that really helped. I think yours has a really good main idea, but
Maybe you could elaborate a little bit on how the choices can affect ones future. For the better or for the worse?

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Will
9/8/2012 01:06:13 am

maybe "The Kite Runner shows us that the past is the past and each choice a person makes can change not only their future, but the someone elses."?

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Emma Chester
9/8/2012 04:20:44 am

Thanks, guys! That really helped! (:

9/9/2012 01:05:04 am

Emma, I love the way you start your thesis. Very original! I agree with maddie; I think you might need to be a little more specific.

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Mrs. Z
9/9/2012 01:39:07 am

You received good advice. However, I'm wondering if you can take your ideas a little deeper. It seems common knowledge that one's choices have consequences (good and/or bad). So, I'm thinking that maybe Hosseini was going for something a bit more than that. Keep at it! :)

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9/9/2012 01:02:36 am

Hey guys I need help with mine as well.

In A Thousand Splendid Suns, Hosseini conveys the message that even though Marian had a million reasons to hate the everything around her, she still found the capacity to love.

I want to stick with this idea, but of you can think of anything to add or change, let me know!

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Mrs. Z
9/9/2012 01:40:45 am

Hi Haley: you're definitely on to something here. A few q's: Perhaps the message goes beyond just Marian? Is she a symbol for more? That even among turmoil people can? And watch your cliches. :)

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Austin
9/9/2012 06:20:12 am

try using more complex words in some areas, like possibly changing "hate" to "detest" or "a million reasons" to "a plethora/ plenty of reasons." other than that it sounds great!

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9/9/2012 10:59:59 am

What if I said then, "even though the characters in a thousand slendid suns had a plethora (thanks for the suggestion Austin :) of reasons to Resent the world around them, they found the capacity to love."

Also mrs. Z, is the cliche in my thesis the part where even though they had reasons to hate, they still found love?

9/9/2012 11:14:49 am

What if I said then, "even though the characters in a thousand slendid suns had a plethora (thanks for the suggestion Austin :) of reasons to Resent the world around them, they found the capacity to love."

Also mrs. Z, is the cliche in my thesis the part where even though they had reasons to hate, they still found love?

9/9/2012 11:14:58 am

What if I said then, "even though the characters in a thousand slendid suns had a plethora (thanks for the suggestion Austin :) of reasons to Resent the world around them, they found the capacity to love."

Also mrs. Z, is the cliche in my thesis the part where even though they had reasons to hate, they still found love?

9/9/2012 11:15:46 am

What if I said then, "even though the characters in a thousand slendid suns had a plethora (thanks for the suggestion Austin :) of reasons to Resent the world around them, they found the capacity to love."

Also mrs. Z, is the cliche in my thesis the part where even though they had reasons to hate, they still found love?

Samir Shah
9/9/2012 04:22:53 am

I don't think I'm getting anywhere

In his book," A Thousand Splendid Suns" Khaled Hosseini expresses the idea that even when life and society take turns for the worst, people should never stop doing what they think is right.

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Mrs. Z
9/9/2012 05:16:52 am

Well, you're getting somewhere, don't fret. I'm thinking you need to take your idea a little further in complexity. It's not necessarily "taking a turn for the worst," is it? I mean, this is a cultural NORM we see in that text. Consider that a little more. :)

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Austin
9/9/2012 05:53:07 am

Make sure the title is underlined as well.

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Austin Latack
9/9/2012 06:04:51 am

"In Khaled Hosseini's novel A Thousand Splendid Suns (underlined), he not only outlines the extreme cultural differences of the Middle East, but conveys them in a way that makes many unexposed readers reconsider the stereotypes they once held about them."

Help me please!

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Mrs.Z
9/9/2012 07:38:45 am

There are aspects of this I really like. You are one of the only people I've seen look into the HOW aspect of the prompt (outlining cultural differences), but I'm wondering how we know he affects ALL readers. Can you claim that? Perhaps think about that section. :)

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Austin
9/9/2012 08:45:47 am

Thanks so much Mrs. Ziegler and Maddie!

Austin Latack
9/9/2012 06:05:49 am

"In Khaled Hosseini's novel A Thousand Splendid Suns (underlined), he not only outlines the extreme cultural differences of the Middle East, but conveys them in a way that makes many unexposed readers reconsider the stereotypes they once held about them."

Help me please!

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Austin
9/9/2012 06:06:32 am

not sure why that posted twice. sorry!

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Katelyn Tillstrom
9/9/2012 06:17:08 am

Okay, I think I have something...?

Frank McCourt's memoir Angela's Ashes reflects on his rough childhood in Ireland, which he uses to tell the reader to not let the past make them who they are today.

Help! :)

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Maddie Williams
9/9/2012 06:24:09 am

I feel like mine is now less wordy, but also now the statement isn't as strong:

"In The Kite Runner, Khlaed Hosseini uses Amir's journey to prove that despite challenges and burdens from one's past, one can press on and learn from them."

Austin, I think that yours is good because it is bring up Afghanistans culture, but I think you could go more into why specifically Laila and Miriam's stories are significant.

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Maddie Williams
9/9/2012 06:24:23 am

I feel like mine is now less wordy, but also now the statement isn't as strong:

"In The Kite Runner, Khlaed Hosseini uses Amir's journey to prove that despite challenges and burdens from one's past, one can press on and learn from them."

Austin, I think that yours is good because it is bring up Afghanistans culture, but I think you could go more into why specifically Laila and Miriam's stories are significant.

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Mrs. Z
9/9/2012 07:41:46 am

Katelyn: I do agree that you are on the right track with the message. Yes, he does reflect on his childhood...do you need that in his thesis? Or is that HOW he presents the message? I'm afraid this will cause your body to be all summary. Also, look at the second half in terms of depth; seems a little cliche. How else can you present a concept close to that, but perhaps a little deeper? :)

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Katelyn Tillstrom
9/9/2012 09:12:56 am

Thank you!! As I began writing my first chunk, I realized I was starting to summarize, but I think I fixed it.

In his memoir, Angela's Ashes, Frank McCourt lets the reader know to avoid letting the past bother them turn them into who they are today, and uses his hardships throughout life to display this message.

Mrs. Z
9/9/2012 07:42:28 am

By the way, I'm loving this!

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Taylor Dale
9/9/2012 07:47:25 am

I know its a little last minute but does any one have any ideas for mine?

Into the Wild by Krakauer is a captivating novel that explains that there is no need for luxeries to be happy.

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Katelyn Tillstrom
9/9/2012 09:07:19 am

It's good and to the point! You may want to elaborate on it a little more, but besides that I like it. :)

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Mrs. Z
9/9/2012 11:36:25 am

Taylor: Good start. Remember it is not your job to let us know if the novel was captivating or not. I agree that Chris shows that one can live without luxuries, but in the end, was he really happy? And why does Krakauer include other stories beyond Chris's, namely a few of his own experiences? Just some things to consider. Happy writing!

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Justin Marutz
9/11/2012 10:20:11 am

Thesis: Going to change the literary elements just need to word it more efficiently.
In Kite Runner, Hosseini describes using literary elements that others can have a personal metamorphosis in a positive way, as Amir changes himself while absorbing the positive traits of Hassan.

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Mrs. Z
9/11/2012 11:11:01 am

Justin: I agree that Amir does begin to model himself after Hassan in many ways. If I'm reading your thesis right, it says that the message is people change? Is that what you're going for? Perhaps it is more complex than that? Some things to think about.

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